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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph provides information about the temperature over a period of 12 months, while the table graph illustrates information about the amount of hours sun in London, New
York
 and
Sydney
. Overall, it can be seen that the temperature in
Sydney
 was much higher in the
first
 and
last
month
 of the year.
However
, the weather conditions were warmer in
Sydney
 and New
York
 in the middle of the year. In January, the thermal readings in
Sydney
 were approximately 26 degrees.
This
 remained steady till the end of March and showed a gradual drop to
subsequently
 16 in July. From here, the temperature went up steadily and accounted for nearly 25 in mid-November.
moreover
,
this
 remained stable for around a
month
. New
York
 started with just under 5 in January but increased sharply to almost 8 in March. The rate climbed up gradually and reached a peak of 30 in July. After
this
month
, it levelled off and
finally
 reached 5 in December. In regards to Londen, about 8 contributed in the
first
month
.
This
 showed an upward trend and crossed New
York
 rate in begin April and stand at 24 in July and ended at 10 degrees, a bit more than NY in December. New
York
 had the highest amount of sunshine, while Londen had the least amount of sun.
Sydney
 had a number of 2473, which was just a bit less than NY.
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