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MODERN FORMS OF COMMUNICATIO SUCH AS EMAIL AND MESSAGING HAVE REDUCED THE AMOUNG OF TIME PEOPLE SPEND SEEING THEIR FRIENDS. THIS HAS HAD A NEGATIVE EFFECT IN THEIR SOCIAL LIFE.

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In the present
time
, more and more
people
 are utilizing wireless
communication
such
 as emails and messaging to minimize the
time
 needed to meet their peers.
This
 has greatly affected their social life in a bad way, to which I partially agree. I believe using
this
 kind of
communication
 help saves
time
,
however
, it can
also
 affect how
people
 mingle with each other personally.  Sending virtual messages has reduced the
time
 needed to meet friends.
Instead
 of spending a lot of
time
 seeing
with
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their peers in a restaurant to talk, they can just catch up through online portals and exchange chats or emails. In
this
 way, they can exchange chats conveniently in the comforts of their home or
to
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wherever they may be. More so,
people
 can still do their jobs or chores while chatting. It does not just save
time
, it
also
 enables multitasking. 
However
, because of the advent of modern
communication
, a lot of individuals now choose to make friends online.
In
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result
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, most of them tend to just stay inside their houses and
use
 their phones or computers all day long. The age group most affected by
this
 trend are
the
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teenagers. They
use
 social networking sites to chat with
people
instead
 of going outside mingling or shopping with their friends. In the long run,
this
 might negatively affect how they engage properly
to
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 other
people
 personally.  I think it has caused good and bad effects on
people
's social life. In my experience, I
use
 emails to inform my workmates about recent news and updates regarding our task because
this
 is the fastest way to reach them, but in
this
 kind of
communication
, my skills in engaging in a constructive discussion with my peers
is
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 not well exercised. To conclude, modern
communication
 affects
people
’s social life both positively and negatively. It just depends on how
people
use
this
 kind of
communication
 in their daily lives.
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