As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers ?

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adults
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dedicate a significant amount of time
at
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their workplace and satisfaction
level
plays a crucial role in
this
place for being happy. I believe that high salaries and
working
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environment enable employees to satisfies at
workplace
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However
, it can not be denied that job pleasure is not obtained by all
of
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workers
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and it is still distant dreams for all of them. It is certainly true that many
workers
strive to earn more money and high salaries enhance their
level
of pleasure.
This
is because they can
compensate
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their basic needs and
also
they can buy what they want easily thanks to high wages and
these
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all of
them
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aid
workers
love
their works sake
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their work's sake
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of convenient.
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to
this
, it is believed that high wages are
the
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symbol of success .
This
thought makes them feel more accomplished mentally.
Secondly
, the working environment has a massive impact on satisfaction
level
because it is not possible to
being
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happy without comfortable and safe. To exemplify, it is evident that the most successful companies like
nike
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enable their
workers
to
having
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positive
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atmosphere ,and they
enables
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them to engage in group
work
and provide them with security. In
this
way, they can easily adjust themselves fully to the area and they are predisposed to being
more happy
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happier

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and showing breakthroughs.
Although
there are some factors about being satisfied in
workplace
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the workplace

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, sometimes it can not be possible
being
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happy in these places for some
laborer
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.
This
is because some of them are under pressure because of the
amount
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of duties and it triggers stress a lot. To exemplify, some
ceos
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of
the
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big companies like
apple
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Apple

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claims that they strive to overcome problems in daily life They say that even if they go
to
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the
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home , they think
how
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about how

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can solve issues about
work
.
Therefore
,
this
situation degrades the quality of comfort of their own space , and it creates stress. Another thing is excessive
work
hours affects the
level
of gladness because if it is not be balanced, they have to make lots of sacrifices like not being able to
participating
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activities
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or not indulging themselves. These
are disrupt
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the self area which is the background of
the
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being delighted . That’s why attaching importance to the balanced
work
hours should be implemented for companies for increasing the employees’ gratification levels. To sum up, high wages and the working atmosphere boost the worker’s
satisfactions
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satisfaction

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and
tendency
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of being successful are increased in
this
way.
However
, excessive
work
hours and under pressure because of many duties pose a hazard for their happiness.
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