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In the modern society, many people think that primary schools should teach science and technology rather than history and geography, which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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There is an opinion in modern society to axe
subjects
 like
history
 and
geography
 in primary schools, rather emphasize more on
Science
 and Technology.I assert with
this
 statement and agree that art
subjects
 must be removed for lower grades.
Firstly
, excluding past and earth
science
 from the curriculum might reduce the burden on
children
 at the beginning of schooling.It
also
 lowers the stress on the teachers to handle multiple
subjects
 and educate the younger generation and make them score well in the exams.The educational syllabus is becoming overwhelming for students as well as the teachers these days.
Furthermore
, it creates free time for
children
 which can be utilized in involving them in physical activities like sports and extracurricular tasks.
This
 will eventually mould the kids mentally and physically stronger. Lack of games might slow down their development.
Finally
,
science
 and technology are more interesting than
history
 and
geography
. So, in the early years
children
 will develop an interest in studying which will continue into later years. It is understandable that competition is cut-throat, but if a 'world class' high-quality curriculum has to be established, it is essential to prescribe less so that teachers can teach better and
children
 can learn better. At the same time, we cannot ignore
history
 and
geography
 completely and replace them with
Science
. These aforementioned
subjects
 are of equal importance which must be introduced to students in mid-school or higher secondary.So that the teenagers would have a better understanding
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 these areas.When passing out of school, one must be well aware of the world's
history
 and
geography
. To conclude, I reiterate by stating that these
subjects
 can be eliminated from primary school,
instead
 introduced in a later stage,as they are of the same importance as
Science
.
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