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In a number of countries some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing near railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. DİSCUSS BOTH THESE VİEWS AND GİVE YOUR OWN OPİNİON.

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 around the world,
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high- speed rails have been preferred more and more. Some
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 claim that governments should spend
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 improving the high-speed rails between cities. Others say that
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 of the aforementioned expenditures , countries should allocate more
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 for public
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 opportunities. As for me, when
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railways
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 for fast trains and public
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 are developed, these
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 a massive good impact on our lives. I will explain in
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 essay about these effects. Safety plays a crucial role in
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 who travel to
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 or school. Drivers have to concentrate on the road not only to avoid accidents but
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 to prevent other drivers manners. Fast
railways
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 to not drive a car for
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. It is evident that they can easily make the trip with professional controlling the train and these
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 allow them to their
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 done while getting to
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 safely. Especially,
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fast
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 aids
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 to save time because many of them are predisposed to
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 some places have abundant opportunities for their
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 or academic life.Even if they take a very long journey, they can easily reach where they want thanks to fast
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 opportunities. In
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both
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 their social and
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 or academic lives.
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public transportation developments prevent traffic congestion.
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 who have a car are predisposed to stop driving and
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 the number of cars declines a lot. It is worthwhile to note that the damage caused by vehicles to nature can be degraded by attracting drivers to
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public
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. To sum up, it is obvious that spending
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 amount of
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for
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 high- speed rails enhance the quality of safety and efficiency between to travel cities.
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, public
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 expenditures have a good impact on
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 the environment and traffic congestion.
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, governments should attach importance to
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