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The growth of online shopping will one day to closure of the shops in cities. Do you agree or disagree.

#growth #closure #shops #cities
Due to the development of
the
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technology, people become more dependable on
internet
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. Many masses argue that the shopping
stores
 will be shut down because, the high demand
of
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 online shopping. I
am totally disagree
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 with
this
 perception.
This
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 reasons supporting the view.
To begin
 with, window shopping is
indispensable
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 part of the life of women.
Although
, they purchase multitudinous items
such
 as clothes, gadgets and so on. But they still
goes
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 to their local market to buy things. Whenever ladies have spare time, they like to spend it in shopping malls and some small
stores
.
For instance
,
recent
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 newspaper report showed that window shopping is
hobby
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 of 55%
women
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of women
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. They get relaxation and reduced their stress with it.
Furthermore
, it is not easy to trust
on
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online
stores
. Numerous kind of stuff is available on some websites but when we ordered something, we never got anything. These sort of frauds are increasing day by day. That's why
,
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 people have trust-issues with these type of online
stores
.
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,
according to
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68% shopping websites are scams because, they does not send your thing which you ordered, nor
they
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 refund. To conclude, it is noticeable that online shopping has
their
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 own benefits but these merits are not enough to close the local
stores
. I opine that these
stores
 are not threatened by online shopping.
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