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The pie chart below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.

The pie chart below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001.
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The pie chart gives information about the percentage of bottled
water
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 usage in different areas of the world in 1999 and the bar chart illustrates how it grew in 2001.
Overall
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, most part of bottled
water
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 was consumed in
Asia
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 at the beginning of the period
while
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 Western
Europe
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 and the USA were the regions with less bottled
water
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 usage.
At the end
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 of the period, most of the given regions (
Asia
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, the Middle East, Africa, Latin America, New Zealand, Australia and the USA) experienced significant growth in terms of drinking bottled
water
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 except Western
Europe
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. Middle East and Africa were few bottled
water
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 consumers with only 5% each in 1999 but in 2001 the rate of bottled
water
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 intake increased by nearly 10 % in both areas. A similar situation occurred in Latin America and New Zealand where bottled
water
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 usage was 10% and 13%, respectively in 1999. Both Latin America and New Zealand experienced the same level of growth in 2001 which was about 13% each.
While
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Asia
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 was the most bottled
water
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 consumer at the beginning of the period with 48%, Western
Europe
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 and the US were the least bottled
water
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 users among given regions. In 2001
Asia
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 kept its leadership in terms of bottled
water
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 intake with an increase of 14% at the same time Western
Europe
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 experienced only around 3% growth.
In contrast
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 to Western
Europe
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, in the US there was a significant increase (nearly 8%) in the rate of bottled
water
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 consumption in 2001.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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