Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
think that it is better to accept
bad
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a bad

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life
situation
,
such
as
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory

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job or lack of money. Others debate that it is better to
endeavor
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endeavour

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and improve the situations. It is indisputable that stay in the comfort zone is the best way to live.
However
, there are the keys to unlock
the
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a

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better
life
for
people
who put
the
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apply

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great effort
on
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in
into

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their ways. According to
this
statement, sometimes
people
need to
work
without passion in their
jobs
and get unfair payments because it is better to risk a harsh
life
situation
catching their dream
jobs
or their goal
life
.
For example
, farmers in Thailand are
jobs
that need to
work
very hard. They need experiences and special skills to plant their crops. Unfortunately, most of the farmers are cut out
their products prices
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the prices of their products
their products' prices

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by the middleman and they need to accept that
situation
because it is easier
that
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than

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trading the product by themselves.
In contrast
,
people
should believe in their self-efficacy. They should have hope and passion in their
life
to reach
the
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a

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better
situation
.
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, there are many
people
proved
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who proved

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themselves
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apply

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that they can
work
in different
jobs
such
as the astronauts. Some astronauts used to
work
as doctors or teachers and they try and improve themselves
hardly
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hard

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to achieve
the
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their

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dreams.
Moreover
, no one can deny that the
success
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successful

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people
always have a strong intention and never give up on their
life
no matter how hard it is. In conclusion, I believed that
people
should not
ignored
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ignore

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the bad
situation
in their
life
, they should try to change
it
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them

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and receive a better
life
.
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