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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
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 think that it is better to accept
bad
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a bad
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life
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situation
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,
such
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 as
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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 job or lack of money. Others debate that it is better to
endeavor
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endeavour
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 and improve the situations. It is indisputable that stay in the comfort zone is the best way to live.
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, there are the keys to unlock
the
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 better
life
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 for
people
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 who put
the
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great effort
on
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 their ways. According to
this
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 statement, sometimes
people
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 need to
work
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 without passion in their
jobs
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 and get unfair payments because it is better to risk a harsh
life
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situation
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 catching their dream
jobs
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 or their goal
life
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.
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, farmers in Thailand are
jobs
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 that need to
work
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 very hard. They need experiences and special skills to plant their crops. Unfortunately, most of the farmers are cut out
their products prices
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the prices of their products
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 by the middleman and they need to accept that
situation
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 because it is easier
that
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than
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 trading the product by themselves.
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,
people
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 should believe in their self-efficacy. They should have hope and passion in their
life
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 to reach
the
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a
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 better
situation
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.
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, there are many
people
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proved
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who proved
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themselves
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that they can
work
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 in different
jobs
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such
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 as the astronauts. Some astronauts used to
work
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 as doctors or teachers and they try and improve themselves
hardly
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 to achieve
the
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their
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 dreams.
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, no one can deny that the
success
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successful
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people
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 always have a strong intention and never give up on their
life
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 no matter how hard it is. In conclusion, I believed that
people
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 should not
ignored
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ignore
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 the bad
situation
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 in their
life
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, they should try to change
it
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them
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 and receive a better
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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