Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Individuals have different views
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teachers
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should encourage pupils to behave well or just focus on teaching academic
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. From my point of view, it would be ideal if
teachers
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educate juveniles and
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them how to be
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person simultaneously. On the one hand, a part of humans argues that as parents are responsible for
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the behavior
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of their offspring so
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also
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should educate them to act well.
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, young adults are in the teen ages in which they often try to imitate
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each other and behave the same as their friends.
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, if
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teach pupils how to act in a proper way, so every child will act the same as his or her peer.
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, there is a general consensus that explanation about what is right and what is wrong from aside sometimes
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affects children
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as their parents’ words.
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,
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impact
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pupils’ manners.
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, another part of individuals
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that it is not
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the responsibility
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of school
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to educate
youngsters
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how to behave well.
Instead
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of teaching
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behavior
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teachers
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should focus merely on
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they teach.
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and foremost, some
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have
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an impolite
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character
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as being rude toward school children. If a child behaves inappropriate way,
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the teacher
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is able to shout or even beat them.
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, severe parents are against
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kind of acts to their progenies
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and argue that
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have to focus on their job. Another example of the notion that
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should only teach student academic
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is
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.
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precise, school
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are able to be distracted by having a lot of responsibilities on their shoulders
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as train youngsters how to discipline well.
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,
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would affect
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the effectiveness
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of lessons in schools. To recapitulate, I hold the view that
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at schools are carrying
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to teach
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behavior
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and academic
subjects
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to pupils, while others convince that teacher should concentrate only on
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in order to provide young adults with
good
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a good
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education.
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