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Some people think that exam are a good way of assessing a student level. other people believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learners and tell us very little about their actual ability. Discuss both the view and give your own opinion .

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Introduction
It is
undeniable
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good
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 way of assessing a
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 . Many people argue that it cre
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ates pressure and it give
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notability
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ability
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the ability
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 of
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student
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 . people are divided on the basis of
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strength
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strenth
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will discuss both the view and side with the former view.
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 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
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in
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 competition
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exam
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 mostly prefered by organization and institute .
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, many
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 select the
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 the basis of practical
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 and skill only.
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 pharmaceutical
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 selecting and hiring the
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 on the basis of experience and practical
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 . They
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 know that
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 interest
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 important for
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the organization
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on the other side, many people argue that they put unnecessary pressure on
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 learner .
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 gave
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exam
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 for
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 post but due to tension and
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 only one lac
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were
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 passed .
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, theory
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also
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 important but it cannot
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show
 the ability and skill of
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in
this
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 competition , experience and
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knowledge
is
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 most important with theory
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 because
multinational
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the multinational
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company
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 do not waste time on
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training
 .skilled
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 lead to
growth
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the growth
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 of
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 .As per UXCH newspaper
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 five lac
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 did
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not
 score well in school but they all are now on the top
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Conclusion
To conclude, for
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 of
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 and organization
exam
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 are
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 important but ,
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 and experience are more important for
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the smooth
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 functioning of
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company
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the company
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