Traffic and housing problems in major cities can be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days with
increases
urban populations, there are major problems with congestion not only price but
aslo
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also
the
avaliablity
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availability
of
accomodition
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accommodation
in large
cities
in the worlds. They can only
solved
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by moving companies and factories to the countryside. I strongly agree
this
has positive side effects in making
cities
more liveable.
To begin
with,
the
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traffic is
major
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problem in the
cities
but it is not from commuting
employement
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employment
sides but
also
from the general public transportation in the
cities
. While
this
may be fact
,
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if the number of employee vehicles
are
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reduced on
cities
street, a
laege
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large
population decrease in rush hours.
For example
, the peaks hour traffic
situtation
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situation
is employee go to
the
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work and to home.
Secondly
, in regards to housing problems,
population
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the population
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is always
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is always increasing
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increases
in the
cities
.
However
,The large apartments are fulled
with
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employee
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an employee
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with their firms and family.
Therefore
, If the housing estate shifted to the countryside, city
apartement
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apartment
cost will be reduced and
certaintly
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certainly
increases
in availability.
To
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conclusion, relocating the worker to
rular
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regular
areas to work and reside. The heavy traffic and lack of
accommaditon
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accommodation
problems in the
cities
changes
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better. As far as I am concerned, I agree the government enforce
such
a law
to
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inorder to
increases
our standard of living in our hectic life.
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