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According to some people, professionals working in the field of science and technology enjoy more respect than artists or musicians. I agree with this view and in my opinion this trend will continue unless the career prospects of artists improve.

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communication has become a serious problem in the modern era.In some ,situations younger
people
 feel it is hard to deal with older ones in some places.
this
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this
 kind
people
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. There are
primarly
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primarily
 two reasons why they feel like that.
firstly
,nowadays most
of
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the
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young
people
 are introverts.
although
parents
 take care of their education,
but
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 they don'
t
 care about their emotions because of their busy schedule.
for
instance
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 assume a child who is living in a school hostel for study purpose,neither their
parents
 won'
t
 meet him daily nor talk to him.in
this
 way they become alone and don'
t
 talk to anyone.
secondly
,in the era of digitalization everyone is
intersted
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interested
 in digital features
such
 as
videocall
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video call
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,
audiocall
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audio call
audio calls
,messaging and much more.they don'
t
 know how to deal with
real
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real-life
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life
 problems if they continue
this
throught
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through
throughout
thought
 out their
life
.
recent
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 study in a school shows that
major
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a major
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 part of children
aren'
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t
 aware of finding solutions to real scenarios.overall,
i
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 can say that
parents
 and digitalization are causing
may
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many
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 problems to younger
people
 with minor defects. there are so many solutions for
this
 type of situation,but
i
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 will mention two of them here.
parents
 need to spend more time with their children,like talking to them
what
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 is right or what is wrong.how to deal with hard situations in
life
.by providing
this
 kind of information to them boots their
life
.young
people
 themselves need to restrict their usage of time on electronic goods and start talking to older
people
.because they are the ones who
knows
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 how to deal with hard situations.to sum up,by following those solutions maybe they can talk to older
people
 in any kind of place. to conclude,younger
people
 need to come out in the world of online games and messaging.
although
 they give you temporary happiness,
but
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 they are not useful in real
life
.because face to face interaction is most difficult when compared with online.
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