Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion.

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Smoking is often not allowed in public areas across the globe. I personally agree with strict smoking laws, and I will put forward two reasons why
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necessary
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with, I firmly
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believe
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belive
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that it is
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commonsense that smoking is one of the primary causes of death in society nowadays.
Smokers
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suffer from a series of potential
deseases
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diseases
after years of a bad habit.
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, family members and
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around
smokers
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are facing a high risk of lung sickness due to inhaling too
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second
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-handed chemical. Individuals who have a family or living in a shared house need to be educated about the consequence of the side effect of smoking because innocent
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around them should not be victims of their terrible lifestyle.
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the physical harm smoking can do to
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in
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of
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, teenagers are
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easily influenced by their behaviour. It is widely accepted that young
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tend to learn to smoke from television and films.
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, they lack the ability
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self-
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control
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are easier to become
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. According to some relevant scientific research, most
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developed their habit since
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age
around
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fifteen. Under
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circumstance, smoking in public areas ought to be
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restricted
in case of having negative effects on
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adolescents. In conclusion, I am convinced that there is
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substantial
evidence to support that smoking in any public area should be prohibited. Owing to the fact that
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are not only risking their own health but
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causing troubles or being a negative model for
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near them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • workplace productivity
  • illness-related absences
  • environmental pollution
  • discarded cigarette butts
  • economic considerations
  • healthcare costs
  • de-normalize tobacco use
  • smoke-free culture
  • initiation of smoking
  • duty of care
  • public health policy
  • healthier employees
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