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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays lots of
questions
 related to personal interests and hobbies are being asked to a lot of candidates in an interview. People believe that asking these
questions
 helps in judging the personal traits of a person while others believe that
questions
 should be strictly professional and related to work. In my ,opinion asking about some degree of personal information always helps an employer in judging whether the
candidate
 is a right fit for the particular job but technical
questions
 and discussions should always take a front seat. The type of
questions
 being asked in an interview depends on what an employer is looking for in a person.
For example
, if a potential
candidate
 applying for a role of a financial analyst, is interested in the stock market and has a hobby of trading in the market, can actually help the cause of the
candidate
.
Also
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 there are
questions
 pertaining to the marital status or location of a particular applicant. These
questions
 do help the interviewer to access how comfortable an employee would be working for that firm. For ,example if a
candidate
 is married and his/her spouse works in a different location, there would obviously be an inclination to get a job in the same location.
On the other
hand
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 employers should majorly stick to professional
questions
 relating to the work experience and technical expertise of an applicant. Whether the
candidate
 is fit for the current role or not will be evident from the past work experience and the knowledge he/she has on that particular subject. In conclusion, probing the applicant’s personal information can be useful only if it is done within a certain limit and should have some motive to access the
candidate
 in terms of his suitability to the particular role but more emphasis should be given on the professional and technical
questions
.
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  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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