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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause?

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Nowadays, with the new “Technological Era” and with the
globalization
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 there are some companies that usually invested money in marketing and
promotion
 in order to let know all over the world their
products
, their business and their company philosophy.
Thus
, they could enhance their
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 as a corporation and obviously improve their sales because in
this
 way people could gravitate towards buying their
products
. In
this
 essay, I will try to justify why large businesses usually spend money for marketing and
promotion
 purposes and why people are encouraged to buy their
products
 advertised by companies.
First
 of all, it is important to underline that marketing and
promotion
 areas are increasingly studied and examined. In fact, in our days there
are
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 some University course where anyone could learn marketing strategies and
promotion
 techniques to
rise
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raise
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 sales
products
.
In addition
, there are
also
 some books or YouTube channel that speak about the power of
advertise
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advertising
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 and the method in which a
costumer’s
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customer’s
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 brain and mind could bring from your side. It concerns evidence
colors
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, selected words and so on.
Secondly
, with the new International globe, it is recognized by all contemporary entrepreneurs that the better way to
dispose
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 your
products
 is to do some promotions
in
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on
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 television, newspapers or social network. Because of
this
,
also
 with the help of marketing’s
power
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 they could improve their revenues.
Finally
, it is normal that people purchase
company’s
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a company’s
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products
 because in today’s world there some techniques and strategy apposite to take to their
costumer
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customer
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 a perfect vision of their
products
.
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