Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and school. Other feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, mostly 30% of the income to the government was generated from the tourism sector. Because in every
country
there are some special places that will be there, like temples with ancient history, and different cultures and special food recipes. I believe that
advantages
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outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, our government was spending a lot of money on developing tourist places to provide a better experience to tourists. Because a huge number of tourists were visiting our
country
everyday
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,
for
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enjoying the scenery of mountains and some hill stations. While our
country
has a long ancient history about temples and cultures.
For instance
, recently, a survey was conducted by our government about for what purpose the international
people
were visiting our
country
.
Although
in
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result
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, most of the international
people
were visiting our
country
for devotional purposes, and to enjoy the mountain scenery which comes twice a year.
Secondly
, because of tourists, at some
point
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the environment was getting spoiling.
People
come from different places to visit our
country
, while they don'
t
know any rules and regulations which they have to follow in our
country
. So they don'
t
know what to do and what not to do, while they will eat the food and throw themselves on the road.
For instance
, recently one incident happened in the
temple
near my house. While I was in the
temple
, one foreign came inside to the
temple
with slippers. Actually, in our
country
slippers aren'
t
allowed into the
temple
. He didn'
t
know that a big clash happened at that time. To conclude, In my opinion,
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the advantages
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outweigh the disadvantages.
Although
people
visit different countries for their own reasons. Before they land, they must be aware of the rules and regulations which were followed in that particular
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of salaries
  • necessary public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistribute wealth
  • wealth gap
  • equitable
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • tax evasion
  • tax avoidance
  • tax revenue
  • burdensome
  • human capital
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