Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and school. Other feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, mostly 30% of the income to the government was generated from the tourism sector. Because in every
country
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there are some special places that will be there, like temples with ancient history, and different cultures and special food recipes. I believe that
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outweigh the disadvantages.
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, our government was spending a lot of money on developing tourist places to provide a better experience to tourists. Because a huge number of tourists were visiting our
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everyday
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,
for
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enjoying the scenery of mountains and some hill stations. While our
country
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has a long ancient history about temples and cultures.
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, recently, a survey was conducted by our government about for what purpose the international
people
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were visiting our
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.
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in
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result
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a result
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, most of the international
people
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were visiting our
country
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for devotional purposes, and to enjoy the mountain scenery which comes twice a year.
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, because of tourists, at some
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the environment was getting spoiling.
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come from different places to visit our
country
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, while they don'
t
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know any rules and regulations which they have to follow in our
country
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. So they don'
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know what to do and what not to do, while they will eat the food and throw themselves on the road.
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, recently one incident happened in the
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near my house. While I was in the
temple
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, one foreign came inside to the
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with slippers. Actually, in our
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slippers aren'
t
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allowed into the
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. He didn'
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know that a big clash happened at that time. To conclude, In my opinion,
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the advantages
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outweigh the disadvantages.
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people
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visit different countries for their own reasons. Before they land, they must be aware of the rules and regulations which were followed in that particular
country
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of salaries
  • necessary public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistribute wealth
  • wealth gap
  • equitable
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • tax evasion
  • tax avoidance
  • tax revenue
  • burdensome
  • human capital
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