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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#protection #responsibility #politicians #individuals
Global environment protection should be addressed by the
governement
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government
 and not by the population. I partially agree with the statement as I believe that
also
 every
person
 can make an impact to prevent the deterioration of the
enviroment
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environment
. On the one hand, all the political organisations should do something in order to prevent
further
 damages in term of pollution. In fact, it is concerning that there are few politicians personally involved in projects that try to reduce sea pollution from plastic and other toxic material.
For instance
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this
 particular
case
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 it must be a decision taken by the local government and not by an individual.
Additionally
, more attention should be placed on increasing companies that can constantly recycle all these material and doing
this
 creating a circular recycling process.
Therefore
, all the politicians have the major
responsability
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responsibility
 to protect the
enviroment
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environment
.
On the other hand
, I
also
 think that if each
person
try
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 to do his best the whole community can be strong enough to make some changes.
For example
, if the problem is plastic consumption and from one day to the
other
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 every
person
 try to reduce it by 50 per cent, the effect of that choice will make an enormous impact on protecting the environment.
For instance
, I believe that even a small action made by one
person
 could change positively the way another
person
 think and act and
this
 will bring
to
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a chain reaction that will
finally
 make a huge change. In conclusion, even if the government itself has the power to make big changes every people can do it as well acting as a community. In the future politicians can
also
 be more pro-active and try to influence the people in a way that they will be more motivated to make small changes that will
finally
 affect
the
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what is around them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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