Young people spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing , tech.) What is the reason ? Is it a positive or negative development?

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his shopping in almost half an hour.Nowadays,
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people
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spending
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most of their precious time and money on
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fashion trends.
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the cause behind
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whether
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positive
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or negative development. In past days, you find hardly 2 or 3 shops in a town for shopping,
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, present days you could see
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one or 2 shops per street. The major expansion of
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business caused to attract more people towards fashion, Developing technology
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online.
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