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Nowadays, different language software are available that restrict the people to learn foreign languages. Learning a new language is important or it’s ok to use the technology for it what is your opinion?

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people
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 to ameliorated and exotic lifestyles under which they find it arduous to extract time for learning new overseas languages they are busy in their own businesses. Studying different tongue is prominent. I will discuss my opinion in the posterior paragraph. Admittedly, in
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 schedule,
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 have enough
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there
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 daily life but educating some new
things
 is very helpful.
Moreover
, due to
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 of
technology
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 everyone fully
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 on
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robotics
things
 they do not want to waste
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 energy to learn
things
 because they get everything on their phone, laptop, computer or
things
.
For instance
, Windsor university done a survey 87%
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of students
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 use their phone to understand the other person talk because they are studying with different nations student and
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 they have
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to understand
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 their
language
.
On the other hand
, tuition of new mother tongues
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 very beneficial because it
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enhance
enhances
 the knowledge about
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 culture and helpful to communicate with other
people
 easily.
Furthermore
, if individuals
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use
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 their technology to translate the
language
sometime
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 occurring the technical error
then
 what they do so if
things
 are in their mode they can quickly answer the other one.
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, if
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business men
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businessmen
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 have enough knowledge to
oversea
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overseas
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 tongues
then
 they expand their business worldwide without any affair of loss. Software
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are restrict
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are restricted
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 the folklore to learn some particular words but if
people
 learn the whole
language
 of
another nations
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another nation
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then
 they have never
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to
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 any field. To
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, learning
language
 is
very
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a very
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 important thing in our life so
people
 try to have some knowledge
by
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 their own rather than avoid the usage of
software
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the software
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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