For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?

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of science, technology and business, and

frogetting

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forgetting

value

of arts which played

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important

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reliable

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art

. Arts has many forms like painting, music, dance, sculptures,crafting and so on

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those are representing our culture,

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loving and interesting about

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utilities which are comforting their life.

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and technology are making new

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and facilities to make our life easy than earlier and

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like to use those.

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, new cars, phones and home

appliences

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appliances

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generation and nobody

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about old pictures, statues or other old things. Some individuals care having

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knowledge

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ancient

art

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securing

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Govenment

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should take some actions to

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encourage

the

people

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art

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museums,

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exhibitions

and research centres and giving some rewards for those

people

will motivate the others.

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about

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art

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those activities like painting, drawings,crafting and taken to those places.

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, museums and

art

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galleries

should open for students with free access and provide space to show their skills. To conclude, day by day current world is

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forwarding

to future with latest science and technology and leave behind the

value

art

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persons and

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generation who wish to see their history

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