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Write a letter explaining water issues in your apartment

#water #apartment
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Daniel/ Uzoma, I think it
high
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 time you escalate
this
water
 issue in my unit to your management if you have not done so. Since I moved into the unit in 2016, I have battled
this
 problem of
water
 running dry in my
tank
 simply because anytime you pump
water
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 the
tank
 is not filled or sometimes
water
 does not get into the
tank
. Jide had tried to
solved
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this
 problem when I
first
 moved in but to no avail. I
then
 took it upon myself to let your staff understand the routine of shutting up some taps to enable me
get
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water
 when they pump. I am tired of reminding them to do
this
 every time.
Instead
 of them
to follow
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following
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 the routine they take a ladder to start climbing up the manway to check the
tank
. The pop in
this
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these
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 areas
have
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 cracks all over the edges
..
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.
...
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 I am always running out of
water
 sometimes in the middle of the night or when taking my bath not to mention the
colored
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water
 because
water
 is always at
it
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 lowest point in the
tank
. I have at the backyard jars filled with
water
 just
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in case
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incase
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in case
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. I have resolved to find other alternatives possibly get a 1000
liters
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litres
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tank
at
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in
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 the backyard. I am just tired of
this
 kind of service. Regards, Chris
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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