Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

What you learn at a tender age can play a huge role in what you will be as an adult. That learning comes from varying sources including group activities offered by institutions or hobbies and interests practised in their leisure time. Both of these aforementioned means to get indulged in curricular exercises has had a debate between them which
this
essay will throw a light on.
To begin
with, planned group events have been a part of the school curriculum for a long time. These activities put children in teams to work together on a problem.
This
not only teaches them teamwork but
also
promotes communication and improves social skills.
Furthermore
, schools have the necessary resources to accommodate as well as provide an environment of development and focus.
On the other hand
, letting children control what they want to take part in their spare time can provide positive results for certain individuals. Giving them the freedom to choose what exercise they undertake will lead to an increase in motivation and determination to accomplish what the activity wants. It will
also
give the child a boost in positivity and develop more skills in an activity they already have an interest in.
For example
, a kid which is interested in playing football chooses to take part in a football club will improve his skills and knowledge about the game. To my mind, participating in events organised by schools is the most efficient way to deliver knowledge to pupils. Schools have the necessary resource and funding to implement a system to nurture the minds of children through activities which a child may not have access to at home.
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