The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

The future of shops and malls
are currently threaten
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by the impressive successful performance of e-commerce. I personally believe that the advancement of technologies, tied to better prices and the
comforf
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comfort

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of getting the purchases without leaving the house will
disencourage
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people to buy things in person. Some may argue that the end of physical stores looks like more a fairytale (or a not-so-funny joke) than a realistic prevision. The fact is that economic newspapers have been telling us
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. Recently it was aired on a national TV channel that several malls in California and Florida were closing their doors and dismissing their employees. Specialists say that the Covid-19 pandemic played an
essention
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role in
this
outcome, but they
also
highlight that the sector has not been performing
satisfatorily
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well for almost a decade. I personally believe that the ease of buying virtually almost anything using a cell phone or a PC made our
stressfull
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current lives more productive.
Moreover
, it is noteworthy that prices of online purchases are slightly lower than those found in physical stores, and in some major American cities,
such
as LA, New York and Chicago, people may get their products faster since some companies are now using drones to do the shipping. The most impressive case of success
undoubtdly
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is Amazon.
This
company is one o the most valuable saller on Earth, and it is
also
recognized by the cutting-edge products and services they provide. All in all, we live in a
constant-changing
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world and the way of how businesses are made
change
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over time. Since
costumers
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on
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better offers, rapid delivering and comfort, I am certain that there is not much left for physical stores.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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