You recently went to a concert and though one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Say how you feel about his performances. Give details of your musical activities. Explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities.

Dear Michael Biden, I was privileged to attend your concert
last
night and I am writing to let you know not only your catchy tunes caught my attention but
also
your impressive performance on stage persuade me to ask you I would grateful if you could contribute to our company and help us in mentoring.
This
is to say, I am Anna Biden, executive manager of the Talent Development Agency which has already had more than a hundred albums reached the top of the chart, 11 studio albums with Shakira and 14 manufactured albums with Celine Dion,
for example
. No to mention, our company has recently aimed to help talented ones across the world making their dreams come true and
thus
being a star in the music industry. Having to say, we would like to offer you a contract in framework mentoring our candidates who are willing to attend our TV show and
then
becoming a famous pianist. All in all, I wonder if you accept our invitation to help us as a tutorial member in the talent search show. Absolutely, your experience in playing the piano and conducting a lot of concerts can impact our results. Thank you for your time. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Anna
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