Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With Today's technology this process is happing at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment.

Technological advances
is
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very effective on
job
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who do the job around the
technology
and without knowledge and Today's
technology
is totally
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on
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technology
system. In my opinion,
technology
is giving to us about all
enjoiying
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enjoying
movements. All around the world everyone
have
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a
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latest technological
equipments
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equipment
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.
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, Recently,
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most students going to choose the study
in
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the
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abroad. They can not meet
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in
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the
sort
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time
but they can
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with each other on
face
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to face video calling that
time
people
think they do not have distance from
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country to abroad.
In addition
, some
people
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work at home and they handle to your workplace work as well as employments.
Nowdays
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,
people
have
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laptop
laptops
, i-pad, computer,
camera
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a camera
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that
machine's
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are completely change
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the world.
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, when
technology
is not going to faster
that
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time
people
want
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to
one
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place to another place they use the bicycle
otherwise
some
people
go to by walking. Before some
people
storage the
finacial
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financial
history in the notebook they cannot save anywhere that
time
we do not have
computer
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a computer
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or other items. In conclusion,
technology
is really giving to the love of life and the world are growing more and more biggest on high level.
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