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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With Today's technology this process is happing at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment.

#century #advances #people #workplace #technology #process #rate #unemployment
Technological advances
is
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 very effective on
job
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the job
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 who do the job around the
technology
 and without knowledge and Today's
technology
 is totally
depend
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 on
latest
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the latest
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technology
 system. In my opinion,
technology
 is giving to us about all
enjoiying
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enjoying
 movements. All around the world everyone
have
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a
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the
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 latest technological
equipments
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equipment
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.
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, Recently,
the
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most students going to choose the study
in
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the
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abroad. They can not meet
to
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in
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at
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 the
sort
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short
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time
 but they can
talking
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 with each other on
face
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a face
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 to face video calling that
time
people
 think they do not have distance from
native
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 country to abroad.
In addition
, some
people
during
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work at home and they handle to your workplace work as well as employments.
Nowdays
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,
people
 have
leptop
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laptop
laptops
, i-pad, computer,
camera
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a camera
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 that
machine's
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are completely change
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 the world.
Other side hand
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, when
technology
 is not going to faster
that
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than
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time
people
 want
go
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 to
one
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from one
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 place to another place they use the bicycle
otherwise
 some
people
 go to by walking. Before some
people
 storage the
finacial
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financial
 history in the notebook they cannot save anywhere that
time
 we do not have
computer
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a computer
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 or other items. In conclusion,
technology
 is really giving to the love of life and the world are growing more and more biggest on high level.
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