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Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that having a permanent job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of whether having a
job
 that you enjoy versus a secure
job
 is a matter of concern for many. Critics argue it is better to have an occupation which gives you a permanent position so the future is bright and unshakeable, while others and I believe, having a career which makes you happy is more vital, as not having one can impact your health.
This
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survery
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survey
 done by Daily Mail magazine, 89% of
UK
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the UK
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 population
prefers
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 have a fixed post over a satisfying
job
. The reason for
this
 is
two-folds
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.
Firstly
, when an individual has a permanent post, he/she
then
 afford to focus on other aspects of their lives
such
 as family.
Secondly
, with a secure
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 one is less worried about paying bills. s
humans
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 we like to have stable things in
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life
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. We want to have a secure future which allows us to relax and think of other things a
sthe
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the
job
 department is secure.
On the other hand
, many believe in order to have a happy and healthy life you need to have a fulfilling
job
otherwise
 it can have
negative
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 impact on
you
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 life.
For instance
, a study done by New Scientist found that three-
quaters
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quarters
 of people who are stuck in a position which they are not fond
off
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they
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are more
likley
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likely
 to suffer from mental health conditions
such
 as depression, and anxiety which
also
 has
a
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 indirect impact on their physical health too. To conclude from the aforementioned examples,
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