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IT IS SAID THAT SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MAKING PEOPLE LAZIER. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#science #technology #people #lazier
It is irrefutable that technical
advacement
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advancement
advancements
 plays a pivotal role in our lives. In order to
this
 progression, it is widely seen that it is making masses
more idle
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. I am
at
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 accord with the given statement.
Moreover
, I will confer my views in
following
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 paragraphs. To commence with, science and
etchnology
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technology
 change our way of life which we lived earlier. Nowadays, We depend on the
technology
 compared to
past
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.
In other words
, due to
the
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techonology
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technology
,
people
 do not use their mind for doing easy
things
,
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 and just rely
over
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the
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technology
.
For instance
,
people
 use google maps excessively compared with the past where there
was
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 no
such
 alternatives for finding directions.
This
is cause
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 the
people
 because they do not remember the routes of some frequent places where they go occasionally.
Thus
,
usage
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 of the
technology
,
people
 are becoming so much lazy enough that they can not memorise
the
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new
things
 easily compared with our forefathers.
Moreover
,
people
 have a source of leisure
things
 which make them more inactive.
This
 is happening because of the
technology
 where
people
 have found
myraid
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myriad
 ways to waste their
qualitive
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qualitative
 time. To illustrate, due to the online web series and
spor
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sport
sports
 broadcasting,
poeple
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people
 spend their whole day only seeing their
favourtie
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favourite
things
 over the internet.
As a result
, they become more nostalgic because of
this
 advancement of
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science and
technology
. In conclusion,
although
 science and
techonology
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technology
 play
significant
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 role in our lives,
but
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there are certain shortcomings like wasting their time and
dependancy
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dependency
of
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technology
 which make
people
 lazy.
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