Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The controversial views are prevailing on the matter
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it's citizens responsibility to maintain a healthy
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or
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should promote it.
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that an individual
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to take care of their own self. On the one hand, it is advisable that each public have to look forward
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their own body. Because, every
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meet different requirements, according to the need and nutrition a person can make
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chart.
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, a person can follow
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type of
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diet
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and protein
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. Personalise
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gives
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have to seek for it.
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, many claims that it is
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responsibility to provide
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chart. As many can not afford to consult
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urge
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government
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to provide basic fundamental values through various platforms
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radio and TV so each and every folk can take the advantage of it.
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argue that
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have to provide. To recapitulate, no one can take
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better care of ourselves including higher authorities,
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chart regularly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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