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Some people think that the government's decision to close the land borders in order to boost local production is a great idea. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this decision? What alternative decisions could have been used to boost local production?

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In the present day, a portion of people supports the government's idea that forbidden the city border for advance local production while others do not see the advantages of
this
 decision.
In
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this
 essay will explain the views of benefits and drawbacks with other solutions for local production.
To begin
 with, closing the borders could be enhanced the local production through some others way.
For example
, to put local population needs as a priority, in order to enhance awareness of the benefits of products for the local communities.
Secondly
, governments can be a vital role
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 the provision of grants, helping the local entrepreneurs grow and transform.
For example
, sustainability and environmental protection are the keys to a long term economic goal in a
nation
.
This
 is to say, the government's decision not only boosts the local industry but
also
 give a vision of the future.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides that exist at the same time,
such
 as the
nation
 would lack competition in global markets.
Furthermore
, the economic relationship between nations will result in unbalance.
Although
 it is a great idea, blocking the country's borders to the world would weaken the
nation
's status.
However
, the government should provide grants dedicated only to the local entrepreneurs and create a reliable system to ensure the grants are not diverted for other uses that can help to boost productions without necessarily closing the door with outsiders. In conclusion, governments should consider
further
 a
nation
's vision, as conduct alternative solution to gain a situation of win-win.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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