The use of mobile phones in public places is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places, so mobile phones should be banned in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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poeple
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people
more relay on mobile phone activity in
such
a way that they
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npublic
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public
places too. So, it is compared with
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smoking as it should not be done among
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the mobile phones have
also
be banned to minimize
its
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use
. I opine it is not reliable decision to
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the mobile phones in public places because it is very
usefull
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useful
device at event and
ocassions
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occasions
.
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mobile phones became the
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primary
thing for people as food. Individuals are highly connected with mobile phone and provide most of the time with
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. Some utilise it in
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way to procure some knowledge and
use
it just for need while others
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it without any requirement and just for time pass activity
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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