Some people think that it is necessary to travel to other places to learn about cultures . Other say that books , films and the internet can be used as a source of information about different cultures. Do you agree or disagree ?

Technology has updated a lot in
recents
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recent
days. Most
of
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the
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people
are preferring
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online platforms to read
news
,
instead
of buying
newspapers
. Because they feel that it's the easy way to read the
news
in their busy schedule. In my opinion, I will agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
, most of the
people
are busy with their daily work.
While
they don'
t
have much time to read the
news
in the newspaper. So some
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apps
were introduced like Times of India and Daily Hunt. These are the
apps
nowadays
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most
of
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the
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people
are using to read
news
online,
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it
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saves
their
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valuable time
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also
. One of the best things about these
apps
is Up-to-the-minute information.
However
, these
apps
provide information very quickly. These
apps
will update the
news
for
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every minute.
For instance
, if any incident
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in
out
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country means immediately i will receive a notification
to
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my mobile through
this
app.
Moreover
, these
apps
were very helpful to
people
.
Secondly
, I think we don'
t
encourage
newspapers
because they are an environmental hazard.
However
, if we prefer
newspapers
we don'
t
know the live
news
which goes
in
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our society.
Moreover
, to print the newspaper we are killing so many trees
everyday
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.
For instance
, my friend lives in a village. He prefers
newspapers
to read the
news
. One day the government announced that today
is
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a public holiday. My friend
doesn'
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t
know the matter and he
traveled
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20 km to reach his college, later he got to know that today
is
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a holiday.
To conclude
, In my opinion, on
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daily
basis
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I will prefer an online platform to read the daily
news
.
Moreover
, by reading
news
on the
internet
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we have some convenience and we will get up-to-the-minute information.
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