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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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In the present day, people argued that what
subjects
 are more important to
students
. A portion of people suggests children should study the science of food, while others think
students
 should only focus on the academic majors. In my opinion, I think formal education is important, while let children understand basic knowledge, like food-aspect, is necessary as well.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why
students
 should learn the science of foods.
Firstly
,
students
 can understand the basics of food made.
For example
, once people understand the ingredient in the foods, they would choose meals wisely.
This
, generally, will encourage
students
get
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 enough nutrition in their daily.
Secondly
, the science of food actually links with academic disciplines, as it copes with technology, biology and engineering
subjects
. As to do so,
this
 would give a practical example for
students
 to have a better understanding of the purpose of the academic field and wider their learning pattern.
On the other hand
, the
students
 only focus on the formal majors selected by governments and institutions that carry advantages and disadvantages at the same time. One of the advantages is that children can pay more attention to the selected disciplines to achieve the expectation from teachers and parents in order to get into better universities.
However
, it is hard to define the meaning of important
subjects
 by anyone else. To limit learning range that easily undermines the nature of interests by a human being. In conclusion,
although
 the
subjects
 teaching in the school are important for
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 field, I still suggest that
students
 should explore practical
subjects
 as much as they can, which will help both in education and
living-base
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 field.
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