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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In
this
 modern era schools are creating numerous
courses
 other than teaching important subjects to the
students
.
However
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 some people argue that the school time activity should be solely used for learning while others argue that they should provide extra curriculum
courses
. On the one
hand
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 most
of
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the
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apply
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people
says
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 that kids should be taught only those
courses
 in which they are enrolled so that they cannot be distracted
for
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from
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 their field of course.
For instance
, if kids are enrolled in
engineering
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the engineering
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 department they think that student should be given lessons on only those subjects which are necessary for
this
 field of study.
Where as
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 ,
on the other
hand
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 some people argue that
students
 should
also
 be given other
courses
 depending upon their hobbies so that it keeps them actively participate in other extra activities, and they think that it keeps
students
 more engaged.
For example
, if pupils are given teachings of
culinary
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the culinary
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 department they get skills of both engineering and culinary which allows them to
fulfill
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 their hobbies. To summarize the two sides of the argument giving various skills to the
students
 other than their
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field
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filed
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field
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 of study is more advantageous.
Therefore
, in my
opinion
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 it is always good to have extra subjects so that it keeps
students
 more actively engaged and enhance their skills.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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