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The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer

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Smoking is injurious to health. It can even cause deadly diseases like cancer. The authority should have
laws
 that prohibit smoking in public areas because it affects
non-smokers
 as well whereas it would cause some
people
 to have limited independence. I personally agree with
this
 viewpoint for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.  To commence with, smoking in public
places
such
 as restaurants, pubs, coffee shops, parks and offices should be banned by
laws
. Banning smoking in public space makes
non-smokers
 safer.
Also
,
people
 who smoke subject themselves to fatal diseases by decision so
non-smokers
 cannot be forced to be around it.
Moreover
, the
laws
 banning smoking may persuade some
people
 to quit and make a more secure environment for others. The government should have
laws
 to determine specific
places
 for a smoker to separate from other
people
.
However
, restrict areas might make some smokers feel their lost their freedoms.
In addition
, several
people
 are dying because of smoking. Cigarettes contain the nicotine that makes
people
 addicted to smoking.
Therefore
, it is difficult for smokers to stop
this
 habit. Smoking not only harms the smoker, but
also
 those who are nearby. In many countries smoking being banned in public
places
 to protect
non-smokers
 due to health damages, and effects on the environment.
For example
, In China developed a smoking policy that only a smoke-free law that bans smoking in all indoor public areas, without exemptions. In conclusion, I personally agree that it should be made illegal to smoke in public
places
.
This
 would improve the health of
people
, and it would be done by the government.
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