Some people say that we should not encourage sport games among schools because they lead to competition rather than cooperation. To what extend do you agree or disagree with?

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Sports
with the studies is the hottest topic around the world. Some people believe that there should be
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sports
among schools because its bring competition rather the cooperation. I totally disagree with
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. The following paragraphs will explain my views on
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matter.
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, it is totally unfair to say that
sports
bring competition among children rather than cooperation. Playing
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games in
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school is healthier and it gives students a bit of
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from study. A child needs both book knowledge and
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needs to play some games to keep
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fit. There is
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that
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"A sound mind lives in a healthy body".
Sports
does not bring competition
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if learner being told to play
sports
like a sport and show sportsman
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spirit
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towards your
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opposite
team members.
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, In every sport that's being
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there is
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at the end to show respect to the other
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team
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weather
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they win or
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lose
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loose
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lose
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Secondly
, A healthy
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competition
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wether
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sports
or studies. There are many famous
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who
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not even completed not all the students are going to good at studies. some will do well in
sports
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fostering
  • determination
  • teamwork
  • rivalry
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • sportsmanship
  • social interaction
  • platform
  • unity
  • physical activity
  • school pride
  • cognitive abilities
  • healthy lifestyles
  • stress relief
  • fair play
  • talents
  • valuable life lessons
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