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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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In the 20th century, most citizens are facing debts because of purchasing unnecessary
items
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, they can'
t
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 afford the amount. In the below paragraphs I will explain some examples and
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 with a proper conclusion. In the modern era, many citizens are enjoying their lifestyle with different luxurious
items
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, they won'
t
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 have enough money to purchase all materials.
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, some people taking loans from banks and they enjoying their cultural life, after some time they won'
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 have enough funds to repay their loan. For exemplify, one of my uncle's was working in a software company. he always bought luxurious things which are not workable to him and
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 he didn'
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 have sufficient funds
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 of
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, he was taking loans from banks. The prevention
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 type of problems, every citizen need to spend amount very carefully, before buying any item people need to think twice about an item is useful for me or not.
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, every citizen is necessary to prepare time table of the purchase list for a
month
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, he needs to purchase these things for up to
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month
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 and
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 will be given a better financial position.
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, my grandfather name is Ravi, he always prepares a list for every
month
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 what
items
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 he needs to buy. Never the less, he leads life very happily in form of a financial position. To conclude, the citizens are enjoying life happily with luxurious things, they
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 taking loans from a bank, at
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, they won'
t
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 have sufficient money to repay. To solve,
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 problem every person need to prepare a list of every
month
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 of purchasing
items
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 that the person requires.
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