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population in Japan, which begins to decline afterwards. Future trend indicates for an ageing society.

The given bar chart and table illustrates
Japan
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's
population
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 trend in the past, present and future. Overall, it can be seen that 2005 was the peak of
population
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 in
Japan
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, which begins to decline afterwards. The future trend indicates an ageing society. The bar chart shows that in 1950
people
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 in
Japan
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 were 84.1
million
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,
then
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 started increasing gradually and figure culminated with the
population
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 in 2005, with 127.8
million
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. After ,that it started declining gradually and reached 125.4
million
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 in the year 2015. in 2035 and 2055, the number of
people
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 will be 110 and 89.9
million
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 respectively. The table indicates the
population
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 distribution of aged 65 and over; in 1950, the number of
people
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 aged 65 and over was 4.1
million
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 (4.9%), which was very low. In 2035,
Japan
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 will have an ageing society, with 34.0% of the total
population
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, which was only 20% in the year 2005. In 2055,
this
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 old age figure will contribute to 41.0%, with 36.5
million
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people
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 in
this
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 old age category.

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