Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.What is your opinion about this?

A
lot
of
people
are trying to keep their offices and homes tidy and put their equipment
on
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the correct
place
.In my
opinion
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the
place
where you are living or working should be always clean.I always try to clean up and if the
room
is not organised or the things are not
is
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their
place
it can make me
unconvenient
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inconvenient
and make me
nerveous
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nervous
. On the one hand, I can understand those
people
who are keen on cleaning their own
place
. I think that a
lot
of
people
can rest and relieve stress, while they are making
room
or workplace tidy.
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, I
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belive
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that when you
cleand
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cleaned
clean
your
room
you
also
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the
microbs
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microbes
microbe
.
Also
,a
lot
of
people
like to do
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.
Additionally
, I think nowadays
people
have washing machines, which really helps and save your time.
On the other hand
, there
is
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people
who
trurly
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truly
do not like to tidy their
accomodation
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accommodation
or workplace.Honestly,
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could be hard for me sometimes to do it,
esspecially
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especially
, when you are living in a big house with a
lot
of floors and rooms.
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,
people
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who can't do that on their own
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hire a housekeeper, which is good if you have a big salary.Honestly, I think they do not have time for that.
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, if you are a
buisness
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business
man and you have a
lot
of flys and meetings. To sum up, I
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belive
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that humans should clean up their area where there are,
instead
of hiring a maid.
This
essay agrees that
people
should keep their
accomadation
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accommodation
tidy.My mum always told me to make my bed and clean my own
room
and I am very thankful for that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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