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Some people say history is one of the most inmportant school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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ancestors
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learning
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 of our path. Whatever, in every aspect of our lives
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technology
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 idea about plants, animals, human, weather and about
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
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is
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everyone
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it. I reckon, learning about modern
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fundamental it is unpredictable to even think about
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today's
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life
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