Some people say history is one of the most inmportant school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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group of
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history
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subject
in school in the row of importance.
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In fact
, it is not exceeding
science
and
technology
from the most
significent
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significant
subject
list. In my opinion,
technology
is
most
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needed
subject
in
present
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era.
Todays
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world changed, everything you do, there is must uses of
technology
even if wanted to learn about
history
. Some believe
history
subject
is vital for to be entrenched with our
encestors
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ancestors
.
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,
new
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generation should aware of how they
exists
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or about their region.
That is
how they can be in strong relation with their basic, to break difficulties of their
life
they can tackle it easily.
On the other hand
,
technology
and
science
is
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also
playing a
significent
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significant
role in our
life
. Whether want to know any specific information or
laarning
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learning
about our body we can get any type of information through
tachnology
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technology
and
science
.
Technology
help
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us even navigating
way
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the way
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of our path. Whatever, in every aspect of our lives
technology
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is
significent
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significant
. While
science
gives us
full
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a full
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idea about plants, animals, human, weather and about
environment
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the environment
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through
technology
. In conclusion,
science
and
technology
is
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most important for
eveyone
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everyone
to research
in
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it. I reckon, learning about modern
life
via
technology
is
our
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apply
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fundamental it is unpredictable to even think about
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today's
today
todays
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world
life
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without it. Along with it,
history
should
also
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it for knowing about our ancestors.
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