Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Exercise is always playing a vital role in
humans
life.It is believed that parents should encourage offspring to invest less time Change the noun form
human
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in academic
academic
and more time devoted to strong Fix the agreement mistake
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workout
.I completely Fix the agreement mistake
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accord
with Verb problem
agree
this
statement and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in forthcoming paragraphs with relevant illustrations.
To commence with, why guardians need to encourage their juveniles to spend more time in body Linking Words
workout
, the reason behind Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
is
that children always live fit if they do more focus on Correct pronoun usage
this is
the
exercise and never survive with any health Correct article usage
apply
issue
.Fix the agreement mistake
issues
For example
, everyone knows that education is very significant for pupils.Linking Words
However
, if students participate in any sports Linking Words
activities
, the former could not find any difficulty with a medical issue.Use synonyms
Moreover
, if the person Linking Words
will
not fit Verb problem
is
then
it is not possible for him to give an examination if he or she suffering from a fever
To add more, children should participate in sports Linking Words
activities
.Use synonyms
Due to
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fact
they could learn many things from there Add a comma
fact,
such
as discipline, communication Linking Words
skill
and team spirit.Fix the agreement mistake
skills
For instance
, cricket has 11 members of the team.Everyone knows their own responsibilities over there.People can learn how to play with teamwork and how to stay calm in any circumstances.Linking Words
Apart from
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this
,it will help to expand their friend circle.Linking Words
Therefore
, paying attention to strong exercise Linking Words
always
crucial in Add a missing verb
is always
humans
lives.
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To conclude
, owing to the reasons Linking Words
such
as children always live fit, fine and strong with the body Linking Words
activities
and always learn teamwork and more socialize in their life.I am in favour of who opine parents should motivate to their wards to do more focus on physical strength Use synonyms
activities
.Use synonyms
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