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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Some
people
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 believe that it is good for
students
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 to teach them about
food
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 in
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 while others think that
students
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 should
study
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 important
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school
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.From my point of view, I do not totally agree with both opinions. On the one hand,
students
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 should learn about the
science
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 of
food
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 and how to prepare it.
Food
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 is one of the most important parts of
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’s
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, there are a lot of advantages if
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 know more about
food
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. If
students
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 are good at the
science
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 of
food
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, they can live independently, without support from others.
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, understanding why
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 need
food
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, and how
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 affects
people
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 in a good way or bad way will help
people
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 be aware of which kind of
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 they should choose to have a healthy life.
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, in the future, with population growth, there is not enough
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 for humans, the
knowledge
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 about
food
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 and how to create new
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 is the key in history. It is crucial to get more
knowledge
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 about the
science
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 of
food
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 to resolve an issue about the lack of
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 in the world in the future.
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, it is important to
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 other
science
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subjects
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school
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.
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 eating, there are many other works that
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 have to do in their life
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 and to do these works,
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 need to know about them.
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,
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 should
study
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 Math in
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, because without Math, they can not buy or sell something.
Students
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also
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 should have
knowledge
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 about
foreing
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foreign
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people
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 from many countries in the world. All of the
subjects
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 that
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study
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school
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 are crucial,
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 time is the best time to learn about them. In general,
food
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 and other sciences
subjects
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 are important to
people
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.
Students
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 should
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 all of them, and
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, when they feel interested in any field, they can go deeper to get more
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Students
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 should not only focus on either
food
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 or other sciences.
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