some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give opinions

In modern times,
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issue has become increasingly controversial among certain demographic in our society.It is often argued that it is
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to accept worse circumstances
such
as
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unsatisfied
jobs or money problem whilst
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disagree and believe that it's superior to try hard in order to improve these situations .
However
, I am with the latter view.
To begin
with, there
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a plethora of reasons why individuals try to undergo bad situations. since a vast number of masses believe that they don't have anything to do with
this
they can not alter it as it is not in their hands .
for example
, research indicates that about 45%of the masses don't do any sort of stuff in order to improve their
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lives
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because they reckon it is their punishment from
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for
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occurring
sins.
therefore
, people are rand to accept what's happening in their life.
On the other hand
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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