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Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

#tourism #industry #individuals #society
in the contemporary world, life becomes very stressful due to hectic schedule of work and personal issue so people consider travelling best way to rid from tension .
Tourism
 is growing rapidly
also
 it provides
employement
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employment
 opportunity along with knowledge of
diffrent
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different
 culture which
enhance
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 the knowledge of young
genreation
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generation
.
To begin
 with, numerous countries working efficiently to promote the remarkable and incredible field of
tourism
 ,
it
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attracts
amount
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 of opulence that could be generated from exploring places.
Moreover
, the
tourism
 sector contributes
significantlly
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significantly
in
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GDP
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 growth and earning of the nation.
for instance
, in India there are a plethora of historic places, tourists came to visit from
diffrent
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different
 nation which
increase
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 the flow of currency that boost the economy . Apart from that, visitors get a chance to learn
new
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 language, tradition and culture which enhance their knowledge and confidence by learning new things
diffrent
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different
 from their lifestyle, as well as, it creates a strong bond between
country
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the country
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 as well. Moving
further
,
effectual
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the effectual
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 outcomes of
tourism
 is extremely beneficial for an individual . The
tourism
 sector accommodating
massive
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a massive
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 number of unemployed people,
therefore
,
reduction
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a reduction
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 in crime is noticed. A number of masses become self-dependent that makes them able to take
decision
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a decision
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 and
to
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apply
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raise savings and
finds
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funds
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 so that they can
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their need.
fo
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for
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 example,
travel
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the travel
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 industry explore the offer services like tourist guides visitors who are
unfamilier
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unfamiliar
 to place they come to visit and in hotel industry waiters , managers and other
stuff
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staff
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 provides service to them that helps them to run their life. To conclude ,
travel
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the travel
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 industry bring prosperity and commendable benefits for
soceity
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society
 and
nation
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the nation
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 as
flow
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the flow
a flow
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 of cash helps in growth .
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