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Some people think that economy progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country's success. What are these factors? Which, of all factors,do you think are most important?

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Economic
progress
 aids countries to be in a better position. But most people disagree that economic
progress
 is the only way to measure a
country
’s
success
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the common
factors
 and the most critical
factors
 related to the
country
’s
success
. Predominantly, the economy is the main factor affecting the
country
’s
success
,
for example
, import and export, (GNI) Gross National Income, and (PPP) Purchasing Power Parity.
Conversely
, some people believe that some other
factors
 can be used to measure,
such
 as
quality
 of living, sports, living costs, and natural
resources
. These common
factors
 will vary from
country
 to
country
, and it depends on how they managed the
country
’s
success
. From all of these, the most important
factors
 are
quality
 of living and natural
resources
;
for example
, the USA, UK, Australia, and Canada can maintain
quality
 of living long before because they always manufacture
high
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quality
 items for their locals the export purposes. When we discuss natural
resources
, most Asian countries have their
resources
. But they failed to take maximum advantage due to the inferior technology. Qatar became the wealthiest
country
 in the world as they produce Oil and Gas globally. The above two
factors
 are significantly affecting to
country
’s
success
. In conclusion, the facts we have discussed above are all related to the
country
's economic
progress
. If the
country
 has natural
resources
 and the proper technology, there will be automatic
progress
 of other
factors
.
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