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government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects to develop the country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #science #education #subjects #country
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certainly true that. Technology briskly increases day by day.
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, people can get many types of knowledge about their study.
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 it is very essential for everyone. Because
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in the modern technology we can handle
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 is very effortless in
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 technology. So I partially agree with
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 of all, I opine that government should invest too much money in
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education
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.
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,robots are very inevitable in
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. People can get
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. As well as they can earn
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 of money. With the help of
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science
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 we can reach
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the moon.As well as we can live
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 the moon and see
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 of things. So
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shold
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 be more developed in the modern world.
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, scientist
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 of places on the moon. So
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 increases very inevitably.
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subjects
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 very necessary for everyone like as, math, history computer
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.
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subjects
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 are very significant for people. With the help of ,
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 we can see everything related to
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education
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, we can get a lot of experience from these
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. It is very helpful in our
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. So some important
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 very good for the
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. To summarise, according to
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science
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education
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 is very essential in the modern world. So government should provide money for
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education
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. With the help of
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education
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 we can make a good
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very beneficial for
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 generation.
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