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When choosing the best candidate for a job, employers should consider personal qualities more than qualification and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The job market started being extremely demanding and has changed drastically in the past decades. I strongly believe that
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qualification and experience required by each employer are more valuable than the individual qualities.
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 my opinion, it ought not to be mainly considered while offering any job role.
Firstly
, employing someone with a relevant degree and gained years of
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 will be more beneficial for a company.
Furthermore
, that person can bring fresh ideas and enhance co-workers to
further
 progression in their career leaders.
In addition
, well experienced and trained people are the key to
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further
 success and development.
Moreover
, that person will be able to support others and
for instance
, offer the
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 and share previously gained knowledge.
However
, it is important to not let
this
 employee
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 and lose
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 to do.
Secondly
, it is not true that the individual character is less relevant during an interview,
however
, it should not be the only reason for getting a position.
The personal
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 qualities can be changeable and dependant on many factors like
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weather, day or
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health condition.
Additionally
, we can work on them and aim to improve in the future. Definitely, it is not something that will remain at the same level. To sum up, the process of
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 for the dream post is a complicated process and never ought to be relying on just one point. Considering candidates abilities and adequate degrees need to be a priority to find the best applicant on the market. The personal traits are good to look at,
nonetheless
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 must be taken to
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account at the
last
 stage.
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