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Working abroad can help employees earn a great deal of money and gain more benefits. However, some people think this trend has many negative impacts. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working abroad.

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The innumerable
job
 opportunities are attracting
job
 seekers globally which
has
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 resulted in people started to move abroad to earn better than what they are being offered as a payscale in their own
country
. Apparently, With
an
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ease in
immigration
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 process and demand
of
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 technical skills, It has become a dream for most
of
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the
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professionals to settle abroad. Some people are of the view that with its benefits, there
are
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 certain downside
also
 of working in a foreign
country
 which will be elaborated in
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To begin
 with, working off-shore definitely has many advantages which
includes
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 lucrative benefits attached to the particular
job
, gaining of global exposure and most importantly better lifestyle with
work life
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 balance. To exemplify,
person
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 working in India for 10 to 12 hours a day would be earning way less than a professional working in a developed
country
 like
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 States of America due to fixed remuneration for defined working hours being followed in
aforesaid
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country
. The fact that even though while working in a foreign land has
it's
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 advantages, clearly we cannot afford to ignore the demerits. The initial years of working abroad
brings
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 about different kind of struggles like language barrier, unfamiliarity with work culture,
home sickness
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 and in
adverse
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 situation, many people face racism which results in demotivation while performing
job
 responsibilities at their respective
work places
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. In conclusion, it can very well
inferred
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 that even though working abroad has its positive benefits and many professionals
look out
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 for opportunities in moving miles away from their native
country
, it is advisable that they should essentially be well prepared in facing and eventually winning over few hurdles in achieving their dreams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional growth
  • Cultural shock
  • Remittances
  • Global networking
  • Expatriate
  • Brain drain
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • Exploitation
  • Professional migration
  • Economic benefits
  • Bilateral agreements
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