Rates of diabetes and obesity are increasing in many countries around the world. Some people think that the government should ban soft drinks and sugary snacks from schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this proposal?

A healthy nations

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Healthy nations

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only can build a healthy generation. Nowadays

the

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large number of diseases are increased in many countries around the world which is Diabetes and Obesity sugary

esity

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site

website

entity

.

However

, a fair amount of people

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believe

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belive

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believe

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that soft

drinks

and sugary

snacks

should prohibit from schools by the ministry. I strongly agree with

this

manifesto and I will be mentioning my points in the upcoming paragraphs.

To begin

with, there are many reasons to support

this

project.

First

, the children are mostly affected

to

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these kinds of

snacks

therefore

,

this

scheme will initiate to start in school while they will get

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awareness

anout

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about

this foods

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this food

these foods

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.

Secondly

, every school is taught moral value, and good habit in order

to

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a child can survive not only the knowledge but

also

good and bad things.

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Secondly

, if the ruling party should forbid unhealthy

drinks

and

snacks

since

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schools, the kids never prefer to taste with these kinds

in other words

they may become hate health spoiled foods.

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,

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recent

recend

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survey said that clearly more than 80% of the babies are being addicted to

the

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sugary

snacks

and soft

drinks

.

Furthermore

, when the

administation

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administration

stop these kinds of items, undoubtedly the

next

generation people have a chance to avoid

this

disease

such

as

obesidy

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obesity

and diabetes. In ,addition, if the executive block these products while the amount

production

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may become decrease in order to many companies would produce organic food item

instead

of

deterimental

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detrimental

products

as a result

,

this

can lead to

reduce

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the disease level.

Moreover

, many children affected

of

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diabets

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diabetes

and obesity in

busy

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world.

For example

, many developed countries are already strictly followed

this

idea from their

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schools

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shools

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schools

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and they are given

nutrition

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a nutrition

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food chart to the parents in order to they will build a healthy nation. To conclude, in

this

modern era, technology is growing day-by-day in

various

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way .

Nevertheless

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people can not awareness

about

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their health

as a result

, automatically disease ratio is

extanded

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extended

.

Therefore

, the cabinet should suppress

deterimental

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detrimental

sugary

snacks

and soft

drinks

from school in

oder

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order

to we can create a better world

this

means we would

be stay

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away from diseases.