- Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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continiously
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, which mostly depends on what is currently trending, not
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what they originally want to do in
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free time. I firmly agree with
this
, as
people
tend to get attracted more
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new
trends
. I will
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more aspects related to
this
statement. Nowadays, there can be seen
continious
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continuous
change in
trends
and
people
following them. There are many aspects related to it, in which, some of the major are as follows. Most of all, social sites
plays
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a major role in making anything popular by showing attractive
advertisments
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advertisements
that easily attract
a
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person attention.
For example
,
snapchat
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is a social site that
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attention
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of
people
with its exciting filters.
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, the ones who are not so much into it are following for the sake of trend followers. Another reason to
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changing
trends
can be your
friends
and
community
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the community
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in which you move. If your
friends
are always talking about a certain thing or a game, you will
also
start having
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interest
intrest
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in it.
For example
, there was a game called pubg that was on top
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trending games. many
friends
of mine who even don't like to play games start playing it, just for the sake of following the trend. In conclusion, it is said that hobbies changes with time and the
trends
have the main impact
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this
. I totally agree with
this
, as
people
prefrences
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preferences
changes quiet
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often
mainly due to the fact that they become obsolete and something else gain attention.
Moreover
, your company and
friends
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a great impact
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this
as by listening about a certain thing
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from them, you
also
want to experience it in order to be up-to-date.
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