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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, big cities have become so congested that it is causing a myriad of problems which are adversely affecting not only the
city
 dwellers
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 but
also
 visitors as well. I believe that one way of solving
this
 problem is for these huge
businesses
 and industrial establishments to
transfer
 to the suburbs. In
this
 essay, I will explain how the advantages are more weighty than
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the disadvantages. The
transfer
 of big
businesses
 and industries outside of the
city
 will decongest the
city
 since their corporate headquarters, as well their thousands of employees
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 will be relocated outside the
city
 .
This
 will ultimately result in
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 cars clogging the
city
 streets,
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 commuters and,
consequently
,
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 traffic jams. Still another advantage to the relocation of corporations and industries outside the
city
 is the benefit to the
city
’s environment and people's health.
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 cars and commuters together with lesser industrial pollutants equate to lesser emission resulting in a cleaner and greener atmosphere and a healthy citizenry. The
transfer
 to the suburbs will stimulate the economic growth of areas outside the
city
. The move of these companies will create a demand for commercial, as well as, residential land and will likely spur people to put up
businesses
 to accommodate the needs of these
businesses
 and their employees. There are certain cons to the move
such
 as it might cause stress on the family’s income and lifestyle to have to move to another place which might,
for instance
, be farther than the schools of the children. Overall, I believe that there is more to be gained by the
transfer
 of big
businesses
 outside
city
 limits.
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